Hi Valtenius, I thought your eye contact, tempo, and hand gestures were controlled and effective. I also believe the health statistics added credibility. A couple suggestions: Consider your background next time, that it is not too plain. You probably could have taken advantage of the extra 30 seconds (to get you to the 1.5 minutes) to expound on additional points. I think my biggest suggestion would be to consider adjusting your hook at the beginning. If people do not have current health goals, you may not hook them into what you say next. Overall, I thought it was presented well. Cameron
I think this is a pretty good elevator pitch. You did a good job of being professional and I felt like you were very knowledgable on the topic. I didn't get the feeling that you were nervous or merely reading from a script. Your presence and confidence were all a plus. I think a few of the things that you could work on is a better eye opener in the beginning, something that really grabs the audience's attention. Also, I think you could benefit from a little bit more passion in your pitch. Overall though, very good!!
I thought this was a relatively solid elevator pitch. I do feel like your hook could be a little more enthusiastic; however, I think this is a very good idea and felt that you were very confident in what you were saying. Health and nutrition is becoming increasingly popular in our society and I feel like people are going to continue to care more about it and hence, there will be more opportunities for ideas like you are pitching above.
Hi Valtenius,
ReplyDeleteI thought your eye contact, tempo, and hand gestures were controlled and effective. I also believe the health statistics added credibility.
A couple suggestions: Consider your background next time, that it is not too plain. You probably could have taken advantage of the extra 30 seconds (to get you to the 1.5 minutes) to expound on additional points. I think my biggest suggestion would be to consider adjusting your hook at the beginning. If people do not have current health goals, you may not hook them into what you say next.
Overall, I thought it was presented well.
Cameron
Valtenius,
ReplyDeleteI think this is a pretty good elevator pitch. You did a good job of being professional and I felt like you were very knowledgable on the topic. I didn't get the feeling that you were nervous or merely reading from a script. Your presence and confidence were all a plus. I think a few of the things that you could work on is a better eye opener in the beginning, something that really grabs the audience's attention. Also, I think you could benefit from a little bit more passion in your pitch. Overall though, very good!!
Brandon
Hi Valtenius,
ReplyDeleteI thought this was a relatively solid elevator pitch. I do feel like your hook could be a little more enthusiastic; however, I think this is a very good idea and felt that you were very confident in what you were saying. Health and nutrition is becoming increasingly popular in our society and I feel like people are going to continue to care more about it and hence, there will be more opportunities for ideas like you are pitching above.